Hola! everybody…. make way for our next entry to the ‘And then…’ contest. Just reminding, I am not disclosing the author‘s name now so that we can have a fair voting. The write-ups would be posted in the order I receive them… Here are the rules & hints and here is The Scene…

“Bloody hell; just ‘cause someone couldn’t get their watch right, I’m going to miss my appointment”, he muttered to himself when they announced that the flight was delayed. He could just picture his wife smirking at him if he showed up late. Cursing, he immersed himself back into the copy of Autocar that he had picked up on his way to the airport. He turned off the music that was blasting in his ears and concentrated on controlling his temper.

A few years ago his life was perfect. A pretty young wife, all the money they needed, and of course his million dollar face: the stuff dreams are made of. But that was until he met her. Elisabeth Haley, Liz, as they all called her. Today, here he was: once a Hollywood superstar who couldn’t even use the men’s room without being followed; now flying off to Sydney for a divorce interview and no one seemed to give a bloody damn.

A gasp brought him back to reality. He looked up from the magazine and saw himself staring into the face that had haunted him for five years. Liz. She looked different: posh; sexy, even; not the sweet simple girl he remembered. It took him a second to realize she was actually there, her brown eyes widening as she recognized him. Before he could say anything, before he could even alter his bewildered expression, the stewardess told her to take her seat. And she did.

All of a sudden, there was a flurry of thoughts in his mind. So many questions he wanted to ask, so many things he wanted to say. And in a flash, the memories of that night came rushing back to him. How he had, in all his drunkenness, told the only friend he had ever had that she meant nothing to him. How he had scornfully told her to go back to wherever she’d come from. How he had let his huge ego prevent him from telling her the one thing that he really felt: that he loved her. She was gone, the next day. And he hadn’t heard of her again. Soon his marriage had come crashing down and his erratic behaviour, his rising temper had gotten him kicked out of the industry for good.

Now there she was. Right in front of him, whispering into her phone (he wondered if it was her old bestie Katja). He moved forward as if to get up, but noticed the stewardess looking at him disapprovingly. As he settled back into his chair, he couldn’t help but chuckle at this ironical turn destiny had taken. Life sure as hell is full of surprises.

It was going to be a long journey…


11 thoughts on “Camisado

  1. Nice one! I like the depth of the character- how his personality can be guessed thought it’s not described- I also like the British air given to the character, matches with the ‘Autocar’! The story doesn’t move forward as its the same scene, but it’s good how the background has been given without going into a flashback! Also the writer has left a lot to your imagination, including the guy’s name, which makes it more interesting =]
    Really good writing!

  2. I lurve this piece in the sense that it is a scene, or an event! Not a story.. It’s a good write up individually, maybe it doesn’t exactly have a start or an end, but it’s not at all amateur! It sounds very bookish!

  3. I don’t know if I can say I love it…like Scorpria and Vimmuuu I feel there is some element that’s missing..But yes, it is an interesting take..and the shift in perspective is also a nice technique… I guess my only complaint is that nothing really happened in terms of plot but then maybe it was a deliberate ploy to leave it all to imagination.. 🙂

  4. Something might have been missing, true. But the writing doesn’t seem incomplete. I dunno I just love reading a same story from two different perspectives: this guy and Liz. This piece as Nay said is more about the characters than the actual actions and dialogue!
    For me it’s better if a story leaves me wondering what happens next rather than everything laid straight out in front of me….

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